TOEFL Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific theories presented in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 Task fulfillment: 3 Organization: 3 Coherence and Cohesion: 3 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 20

3.任务完成度 虽然你的文章回答了题目要求的问题，但是在阐述听力部分的观点时，有些地方没有详细解释。为了提高任务完成度，你需要更详细地解释听力中提到的观点，并明确指出它们是如何挑战阅读材料中的理论的。

Example 1: Instead of "However, the professor stating that the this may because that Titian is not a original single moon, itis made by several little part, and they maerge together to be Titian." Write "The professor challenges this by explaining that Titan is likely composed of several smaller moons that collided and merged together, resulting in its elliptical orbit due to the force of multiple impacts."

Example 2: Instead of "However, the professor arguing that the Titian may have a simipar situation with Earth. those rock may be dissolved by liquid." Write "The professor counters this by suggesting that Titan's craters could have formed through a process similar to Earth's sinkholes, where rocks dissolve when exposed to liquid, such as the rainfall concentrated near Titan's poles."

4.文章结构与组织 Your essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, it lacks clear transitions between ideas and paragraphs. To improve organization and coherence, use transition words or phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly.

Example 1: Instead of "Firstly... However," use "Firstly... In contrast, the professor explains that..."

Example 2: Instead of "Secondly... However," use "Secondly... On the other hand, the professor argues that..."

5. 语法批改

In the radingreading passage, the author posits that there several unusual features about the Titan, providing three of them. However, the professor in the listening passage contends that now there are some explainations. explanations. Firstly, the author asserts that the orbit of Titan areis more elliptical than circular. Most moons have an almost circular orbit, but Titian doTitan does not. However, the professor stating that thestates that this may because that TitianTitan is not a original single moon, itismoon; instead, it is made byup of several little part, and they maergeparts that merged together to be Titian. Thisbecome Titan. These little part willparts would impact each other soother, causing the orbit isto be more elliptical. Secondly, the author says that the there are no strong evidence of valcanovolcanoes in the Titian,Titan, but still many craters exist near Titian'sTitan's pole. However, the professor arguing that the Titianargues that Titan may have a simiparsimilar situation withto Earth. those rockThose rocks may be dissolved by liquid. There is evidence that rainfulls are happenedrainfalls are happening on the Titian,Titan, and the pools may absorb it. Finally, the author statestates that the sand dunes always slope eastwardeastward, no matter the direction of the wind. However, the professor pointingpoints out that the sand on the Titian areTitan is really heavy, so the wind may not strong enough. The sands may be controledcontrolled by the wind at atmospherein the atmosphere, which is ten times stronger than the regular wind.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

In the reading passage, the author presents several unusual features about Titan, providing three specific examples. However, the professor in the listening passage contends that there are now explanations for these peculiarities.

Firstly, the author asserts that Titan's orbit is more elliptical than circular, which is unlike most moons that have nearly circular orbits. The professor counters this by stating that Titan may not have originally been a single moon but rather formed from several smaller moons that collided and merged together. These impacts would cause the orbit to become more elliptical over time.

Secondly, the author mentions the existence of many craters near Titan's poles without any strong evidence of volcanic activity. The professor argues that a process similar to what occurs on Earth could explain this phenomenon. Rocks on Titan may dissolve when exposed to liquid, such as rainfall which occurs near its poles. As these rocks dissolve and wear away over time, they form depressions or craters.

Lastly, the author states that sand dunes on Titan slope eastward regardless of wind direction. The professor points out that unlike Earth's sand, Titan's sand is extremely heavy and normal surface winds are too weak to affect it. However, powerful storms occasionally form in Titan's atmosphere above its equator and produce strong eastward winds ten times faster than regular winds. These storm winds are capable of moving the heavy sand and determining the eastward slope of the dunes. (241 words)

In the rading reading passage, the author posits that there presents several unusual features about the Titan, providing three of them. specific examples. However, the professor in the listening passage contends that now there are some explainations. now explanations for these peculiarities (Changed "explainations" to "explanations" for correct spelling).

Firstly, the author asserts that the Titan's orbit of Titan are is more elliptical than circular. Most circular (Changed "the orbit of Titan are" to "Titan's orbit is" for proper subject-verb agreement and possessive form), which is unlike most moons that have an almost nearly circular orbit, orbits. The professor counters this by stating that Titan may not have originally been a single moon but Titian do not. However, the professor stating that the this may because that Titian is not a original single moon, itis made by rather formed from several little part, and they maerge smaller moons that collided and merged together to be Titian. This little part will impact each other so (Rephrased sentence for clarity and proper grammar). These impacts would cause the orbit is to become more elliptical. elliptical over time.

Secondly, the author says that the there are no mentions the existence of many craters near Titan's poles without any strong evidence of valcano in the Titian, but still many craters exist volcanic activity. The professor argues that a process similar to what occurs on Earth could explain this phenomenon. Rocks on Titan may dissolve when exposed to liquid, such as rainfall which occurs near Titian's pole. However, the professor arguing that the Titian may have a simipar situation with Earth. those rock may be dissolved by liquid. There is evidence that rainfulls are happened on the Titian, and the pools may absorb it. its poles (Rephrased sentence for clarity and proper grammar). As these rocks dissolve and wear away over time, they form depressions or craters.

Finally, Lastly, the author state that the states that sand dunes always on Titan slope eastward no matter the direction of the wind. regardless of wind direction. The professor points out that unlike Earth's sand, Titan's sand is extremely heavy and normal surface winds are too weak to affect it (Rephrased sentence for clarity and proper grammar). However, the professor pointing out that the sand on the Titian are really heavy, so the wind may not powerful storms occasionally form in Titan's atmosphere above its equator and produce strong enough. The sands may be controled by the wind at atmosphere which is eastward winds ten times stronger faster than the regular wind.winds. These storm winds are capable of moving the heavy sand and determining the eastward slope of the dunes.

8. Mind Map

• Introduction

  • Titan's unusual features
  • Reading passage examples
  • Listening passage explanations

• Body

  • Elliptical orbit

    • Reading: Most moons have circular orbits
    • Listening: Titan formed from smaller moon collisions

  • Craters near poles

    • Reading: No volcanic activity evidence
    • Listening: Dissolving rocks and rainfall create depressions

  • Eastward sloping sand dunes

    • Reading: Slope regardless of wind direction
    • Listening: Heavy sand, powerful storms, and strong eastward winds

• Conclusion

  • Summarize listening passage explanations for Titan's peculiarities

9. Keywords