TOEFL Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 任务完成度：4 组织：4 连贯性和衔接：4 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

25. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，这篇文章较好地完成了任务要求，概述了听力中的观点并对阅读中的论点进行了反驳。但是，有一些地方可以改进以使文章更清晰和准确。首先，在提到教授反驳的观点时，可以更具体地描述教授的论据。其次，在表达过程中要注意避免重复词汇，尝试使用不同的表达方式。

示例1： 原文：“Since we cannot find any one of these ceramic have this mark, so it could not often being contact with high heat and not used for cooking food.” 改进：“Since none of the ceramics show such marks, it indicates that they were not frequently exposed to high heat and thus not used for cooking food.”

示例2： 原文：“So it cannot explain why ancient Greece people make some decorations one ceramic disks when people actually could not saw it at all.” 改进：“This raises the question of why ancient Greeks would create decorations on ceramic disks if they were not visible during use.”

4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构和组织方面表现较好，有明确的引言、主体和结论部分。每个段落都集中在一个特定的观点上，并提供支持细节。然而，在段落之间可以使用更清晰的过渡词或短语来增强连贯性。

建议1：在引言部分，可以简要概括阅读和听力的主题，以便让读者更好地了解文章的背景。

示例1： 原文：“The reading and the lecture both delve into the topic of the purpose of the ancient plate-sized ceramic disks.” 改进：“The reading and the lecture both explore the potential functions of ancient plate-sized ceramic disks found in Greek islands.”

建议2：在段落之间使用过渡词或短语，使文章更加连贯。

示例2： 原文：“Firstly, the writer claims that...” 改进：“To begin with, the writer claims that...”

5. 语法批改

The reading and the lecture both delve into the topic of the purpose of the ancient plate-sized ceramic disks. While the reading proposes three theories to explain the possible functions, the lecture states that none of it is very convincing and rejects it one by one.

Firstly, the writer claims that the ancient ceramic disks possibly were pans used for cooking food. However, the professor refutes this view, arguing that it is unlikely used for cooking food because none of 200 ceramic disks were blacking or discolored. Considering the pan on your home, you will find that it will become blacking or discolored after used for a while because it contacts with high heat. Since we cannot find any one of these ceramic have this mark, so it could not often being contact with high heat and not used for cooking food.

Secondly, the writer asserts that it could be used for drums since it can make sound when it covered with a stretched animal skin. Nevertheless, the professor challenges this point, stating that this shape and size of ceramic drums could not make pleasant sound even with animal skin. Besides, ceramic drums would have been heavy and difficult to use. What’s more, the wooden drums are much easier to play and could make better sound. Therefore, it is not reasonable for ancient people to make these ceramic drums when another better material was available.

Finally, the writer states that it could be serveserved(can be access (accessed)) as mirrors for ancient people because they have similar decorations with metal ancient mirrors. Contrary to the reading’s view, the professor states that the elaborate decoration would not be seen if the objects were used for mirrors. She further explains that people must place the disks with its decoration side down to fill the basin with liquid and bend over to look down at the reflection. In contrast, metal mirrors work differently, people hold them up vertically, so everyone can sawsee(Auxiliary verb + found/saw) the decorations. So it cannot explain why ancient GreeceAncient Greece(Checks upper/lower case spelling of some proper nouns) people make some decorations one ceramic disks when people actually could not sawsee(Auxiliary verb + found/saw) it at all.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage and the lecture both discuss the potential purposes of ancient plate-sized ceramic disks found throughout the Greek islands. While the reading suggests three possible functions for these artifacts, the lecture contends that none of these theories are convincing and refutes each one in turn.

Firstly, the author of the reading posits that these ceramic disks may have been used as cooking pans. However, the lecturer disputes this idea, arguing that it is improbable they were employed for cooking food since none of the 200 ceramic disks discovered exhibit any signs of blackening or discoloration. The professor points out that, like modern-day pans, ancient cookware would have shown evidence of contact with high heat over time. Given that none of these ceramic disks bear such marks, it is unlikely they were used for cooking.

Secondly, the reading asserts that these artifacts could have functioned as drums due to their ability to produce sound when covered with stretched animal skin. Nevertheless, the lecturer challenges this notion by stating that ceramic drums of this size and shape would not create a pleasant sound even with an animal skin covering. Furthermore, such drums would be heavy and cumbersome to use. The professor also highlights that wooden drums are much easier to play and produce superior sound quality; thus, it seems illogical for ancient people to craft ceramic drums when better materials were readily available.

Lastly, the author suggests that these objects may have served as mirrors for ancient people since they share similar decorations with metal mirrors from antiquity. Contrary to this view, the lecturer argues that if these ceramics were used as mirrors, their elaborate decorations would be hidden from sight. She explains that in order to use them as mirrors filled with liquid (such as olive oil), individuals would need to place them decoration-side down and bend over to see their reflection in the shallow basin created by their raised edges. In contrast, metal mirrors were held vertically, allowing their decorations to be easily visible. Consequently, it is difficult to understand why ancient craftspeople would create intricate decorations on ceramic disks if they were not meant to be seen. (363 words)

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage and the lecture both delve into the topic of the purpose of the discuss the potential purposes of ancient plate-sized ceramic disks. disks found throughout the Greek islands (changed for clarity and conciseness). While the reading proposes suggests three possible functions for these artifacts, the lecture contends that none of these theories to explain the possible functions, the lecture states that none of are convincing and refutes each one in turn (rephrased for better flow).

Firstly, the author of the reading posits that these ceramic disks may have been used as cooking pans. However, the lecturer disputes this idea, arguing that it is very convincing and rejects it one by one. ¶ Firstly, the writer claims that the ancient ceramic disks possibly were pans used for cooking food. However, the professor refutes this view, arguing that it is unlikely used improbable they were employed for cooking food because since none of the 200 ceramic disks were blacking discovered exhibit any signs of blackening or discolored. Considering the pan on your home, you will find that it will become blacking or discolored after used for a while because it contacts with high heat. Since we cannot find any one of these ceramic discoloration (corrected grammar and phrasing). The professor points out that, like modern-day pans, ancient cookware would have this mark, so it could not often being shown evidence of contact with high heat and not over time. Given that none of these ceramic disks bear such marks, it is unlikely they were used for cooking food. (rephrased for clarity).

Secondly, the writer reading asserts that it these artifacts could be used for have functioned as drums since it can make due to their ability to produce sound when it covered with a stretched animal skin. Nevertheless, the professor lecturer challenges this point, notion by stating that ceramic drums of this size and shape and size of ceramic drums could would not make create a pleasant sound even with an animal skin. Besides, ceramic skin covering (corrected grammar). Furthermore, such drums would have been be heavy and difficult cumbersome to use. What’s more, the The professor also highlights that wooden drums are much easier to play and could make better sound. Therefore, produce superior sound quality; thus, it is not reasonable seems illogical for ancient people to make these craft ceramic drums when another better material was available. materials were readily available (rephrased for better flow).

Finally, the writer states that it could be serve Lastly, the author suggests that these objects may have served as mirrors for ancient people because since they have share similar decorations with metal ancient mirrors. mirrors from antiquity. Contrary to the reading’s this view, the professor states that the lecturer argues that if these ceramics were used as mirrors, their elaborate decoration would not decorations would be seen if the objects were used for mirrors. hidden from sight (corrected grammar). She further explains that people must place the disks with its decoration side down to fill the basin in order to use them as mirrors filled with liquid (such as olive oil), individuals would need to place them decoration-side down and bend over to look down at the reflection. see their reflection in the shallow basin created by their raised edges (clarified sentence). In contrast, metal mirrors work differently, people hold them up were held vertically, so everyone can saw the decorations. So allowing their decorations to be easily visible. Consequently, it cannot explain is difficult to understand why ancient Greece people make some craftspeople would create intricate decorations one on ceramic disks when people actually could if they were not saw it at all.meant to be seen (rephrased for clarity and conciseness).

8. Mind Map

Mind Map:

- Introduction
  - Reading passage and lecture topic
  - Disagreement between reading and lecture

- Ceramic Disks as Cooking Pans
  - Reading: Possible use for cooking
  - Lecture: No signs of blackening or discoloration, not likely used for cooking

- Ceramic Disks as Drums
  - Reading: Could produce sound with animal skin covering
  - Lecture: Unpleasant sound, heavy and cumbersome, wooden drums more practical

- Ceramic Disks as Mirrors
  - Reading: Similar decorations to metal mirrors from antiquity
  - Lecture: Decorations hidden when used as mirrors, metal mirrors more practical

9. Keywords